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As far as
         The stars may seem
                I'll still reach
         Despite the challenges
I face.

Why should I
         Give in to obstacles
                That laugh, detest
                        And tear me down?
                No! I say,
         I will succeed.

         I see the light,
                I hear the cheers beyond this tunnel
I run down.
Tired as I may get,
         Still I proceed
                Still I fight.

                I am strong.
                        I am powerful.
                                I will keep my head up
                                            And my heart higher.

                                       If I'm not destined to win,
                                Not able yet to reach my dream,
                        Who's to say another day
                Is not on my side?

        I will not give in.
        I am strong.
        I am powerful.
        I will keep my head up
        And my heart higher.
Creativity Portal: 4.26.11 -- Determination even in the face of failure can keep us going and in the process, the lift we get from moving can be exhilarating. Kids often have stubborn determination. We are all still kids. Can you access your kid-like determination and direct it toward forward propulsion?

This is some visualization showing the progression of oneself within the lines. As the poem goes on, the lines get closer to their goal, but constantly get pushed back by obstacles. This change in lines represents life's struggles.
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Mokuze Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I like the use of repetition in the last stanza. If I may say, the sentences seemed a little choppy. Was it an intended effect? I know I pull weird shit like that sometimes. :lol:
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Yamahato-Yokimoko Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011
Haha it was meant to just represent what a person would actually say to themselves. Since when do you see an average person throwing big flowing words around in their head? :P
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Mokuze Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Well I do. :B But I'm a little weird.
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RedicaTranscension Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Professional Writer
As do I. And as am I.
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